Lily is a junior in college who wakes up one Sunday with the
worst hangover she’s ever had. Almost as soon as she's up, she starts
trying to recall the events of the previous night, but it’s evident she blacked
out. Her roommate, Jill, is not in her bed and she texts her to make sure she’s
okay, but gets no response. She does the same with her boyfriend, Connor.
Throughout the morning between vomiting and lying in her bed with a cloth over
her pounding head, she slowly gets flashes of the party she was at. She begins
to realize she made a fool of herself, in her drunken state she went up to people
she barely knew and acted as though they were best friends, giving them advice
on things she had no idea about, and even criticizing people on various things
they were doing (i.e. a kid trying to flirt with a girl and failing, Lily feels
the need to tell him what he did wrong). She was by far the drunkest person
there and is horrified at the spectacle she made of herself. Going through text
messages, she sees she texted some of her friends from high school, and, to her horror,
her high school boyfriend who she hadn’t spoken to for two years. She texts her roommate again, desperate for her to come home and tell her just how bad the damage really was, but right
when she’s about to send it she sees the promise ring Connor gave to her on the
floor and has a final flashback; when looking for her Connor at the party to
take her home, she walked in on him and Jill hooking up in an upstairs room. She vomits, and shuts the phone
without sending the text.
I think this is a really cool idea. You could get pretty creative doing the flashbacks to the party and working in the ways they are triggered. You also have a good twist at the end with Lily remembering her roommate and best friend hooking up after she spent so much time worring about Jill and now she doesn't feel that way about her anymore. This is a great story idea and I'm sure you will do a great job writing it!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Stefanie, great story idea. The only note I have is to make sure the flashbacks are clear because otherwise the story could get confusing. I tried to do a flashback in my last one and had to take it out, but it also fits better in your story so you can make it work.
ReplyDeleteWowsers. Very well thought out. Wish I didn't know the ending. I like it.
ReplyDeleteCould be a little predictable of an ending, which by the way, is TOTALLY okay, as look as there is something surprising about the way you write it, or the way she reacts to the memory. I think this could be great. See what happens as you come to the conclusion. Free your brain! See how you can turn the story on its head!
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